First finished track

[Frarnce]

This is probably the first 'techno' track I have actually finished and got mastered etc.

I can't work out if it is good enough for release anymore though.
Please give me your opinions and harsh criticism etc. Cheers

[LaurentOrchard]

Common man, you have 2 posts. xD i mean jesus.

[TvSkY]

given you seem to have come from a bit of a more house background the production on this shows that

and for the style you have produced it in , it doesn't fit the structure of the song

if your going to do a more minimal deep techno type of track pull your mix back , give things more depth , more layers.

this is produced more like a tech house sort of commercial track , yet all there is is one note driving the track with not much else happening

kinda needs to go one way or the other . this is stuck in no mans land a bit

I quite like your track smoke . nice . deep . id give this track a bit more of that vibe

this is just my personal taste tho . ymmv

[Frarnce]

Cheers TvSky, I'm not particularly from a house background, but I understand why you think that from my recent soundcloud posts.
I wasn't aiming for commercial tech house at all, I was hoping it might fit as the lighter track on a more darker industrial techno release, but I guess it's overproduced and maybe lost something in the mastering too..

[krypt]

Hi,

just listened to the track. Production is nice (as for the first track). You have good starting point. Try to toy with each sound (kick, hihats, clap), compressing and eq'ing it. That's about the production. If you ask about overall impression, it is not techno for me. It's just semantics, but I mean, that 4x4 rhythm with regular hihat, 130BPM and some clap doesn't make a techno track (formally, it does, but I am sure you aim for something better, as we all do, and ask each others opinnion to achieve it). The main work here is to develop some kind of your own driving idea, a pattern that makes you move and is behind the scheme. The same goes for atmosphere and feeling. Music is to old to repeat hackneyed formulas, and some good sounding kick with hihat doesnt get the job done.
Keep working and post the results here. Try to astonish experienced listeners - it will be good determinant of how good the track is.
P.S. a lot of words written here is from my personal approach and some people would disagree, but that's what I think.

cheers!

[Frarnce]

Thanks for the comments. This is a track I did a while ago, thinking about finishing it soon, but would like some comments, what do you think?
cheers

[wouterdewitte]

second track is much more interesting!

[Frarnce]

Thanks, any more opinions on the second track?

[Barfunkel]

Agree, the second one is much better. The bassline is particularly good.