I actually think I like this one..

[Frarnce]

Maybe because I have been drinking a lot tonight, but i think its promising. Feedback and suggestions please

[Mattias]

The intro was the best part.
There is no bass / bottom end in the track, sounds out of phase. The drums are all in the background. It' also very very busy and all over the place, it's hard to get a real focus on what is going on. Definitely needs major rework mixdown wise, if you do that and clean it up a bit, reduce everything that flies all over the place and get back it's easier to give an actual opinion on the music itself. Sorry.

[Ttinga]

I agree with most of the technical fixes Mattias mentioned. But I do think this is kind of an interesting song you have. The synth sounds are cool but the drums aren't doing anything for me at the moment.

[krypt]

I agree with Mattias and Ttinga, but I like this one. I see nice concept there, but its very covered. I don't know how you are going to fix this mess (because its quite messy), but if you do, it would be very good and fresh track. I suggest deleting all the drums (kick, rides, hihats) and bass (is there any bass?) and produce a simple kick/hat/bassline, the background (or the foreground) is very interesting and this track doesn't need much more. Just make it rolling. hope this helps somewhat

[shaneawilliams]

Very interesting and dark sound but it's a bit crowded; much like the rest of the comments, the drums are not very dynamic but I get what you're trying to do with it and it has potential so keep spending quality time on it.

[Frarnce]

I just finished it off. Let me know if you think its any better now. Cheers

[jordanneke]

I didn't listen to the original, and tried not to be influenced by the comments above.

For me it's just too busy. Far too busy. I can only focus on 3 things in a track. There's not one central thing that I can hook onto. Too many things are fighting for space and my attention.

I think there could possibly be two or three tracks in here.

On a plus note, i thought the mix was pretty good.

J

[Frarnce]

Thanks for feedback. Here is one I started last night, let me know what you think.

I always like my tracks when they are work in progress, but end up disliking them a week after they are finished hah.